Rejection #3

Another rejection for "Between Eternities" today, this one from print magazine Fictitious Force. And, again, it's a semi-positive rejection, as the editor remarked that it did manage to make the first cut.

Given the number of people passing through here on a daily basis, I'd like to once again offer it up for critique. The story has gone through a number of edits, thanks largely to the good people over at OWW (if you're a science fiction or fantasy writer, be sure to join up - it's worth every penny). What that means is that I'm generally satisfied with the bulk of the story. However, one question still nags at me, and that regards the final scene of the story - do I discard it or keep it?

If you'd like to give me a hand and let me know your opinion, drop me a line and I'll email you a PDF of the story.

Edit: Forgot to warn anyone who reads - this is the kind of story that'd be R-rated. Course language, violence and implied sex lie within.